Fangala the Flying Feline

Wow. I am in absolute AWE at how much your writing has improved. You just keep getting better and better. There's pretty much nothing wrong with this. The only three ...

My only complaint is that you keep alternating between capital and lower-case i's. Other than that, I found that this flowed well and was enjoyable to read. While the imagery ...

I have nothing bad to say! You have a talent for creating a mood and time period with your desciptions. I could totally see this old man. :D Oh, and ...

Sweet! I loved the light, blissful tone to this; it perfectly captures the mood of little kids' birthday parties. Hmm...I was going to comment on the first sentence, but you ...

Indeed, very sweet. You definitely have a way with words. However, my mind wandered while reading this, but it was most likely due to my little sister screaming that she ...

Um... Well, your saving grace is your emotion. I could tell you spilled your soul into this poem, so that's the good news. The bad news is that is this ...

Well, I must say I really enjoyed this! Your first stanza was the best, thanks to the line, "Blood is not ketchup." That line saves the poem. Without it, it ...

Yes, Chapter Two! I've been wondering what happened to you, wolf girl. :D Bravo. This is much better than chapter one. I like Asriel's spunk; she's one of those protagonists ...

Wow. For your very fantasy, I'm very impressed! Your characters are indeed very likeable, but you can easily go into more detail. A story like this benefits from being character-driven, ...

Yay! This is quite a few steps up from your don't-do-drugs advertising jingle. :D I thought it was really sweet and heartwarming, like Acoustic up there said. I can relate ...

Yup, you should definitely write slogans! :D This isn't exactly a poem, but I think it's cute. I especially like how the last line doesn't rhyme. It's like you're smacking ...

Hi, Azila! I love this, but I won't say any more, because I'm running the contest. :D Yay, I love Miyazaki! Have you seen Whisper of the Heart? That's my ...

Haha, I loved this! Personally, I thought the previous reviewers were too harsh on you. Not everything has to be metaphorical. I mean, sometimes us writers want to let loose ...

Wow, nice. I like the flow of this, but it gets repetitive near the end. You could easily shorten this by cutting out wordiness and replacing it with striking similes, ...

Bravo. I liked this. Your first few paragraphs are gripping, both with style and content. (I love short paragraphs :D) However, I agree with Squallz that your protagonist is bland ...